The Exemplification Essay

The need for clothing is one of life‘s bare necessities and how we choose to wear it defines the kind of person we are. I believe that the quote, “what you are is what you wear“, is entirely true because people express themselves and their feelings through their appearances. In order to express ourselves accurately we must be aware that clothing reflects personality traits, social status, and occasions.

To begin, consider athletes who tend to be more casual in their choice of clothes, and when it comes to color choices they would choose bright and vivid colors. Another example would be a manager who tends to be meticulous in choosing clothing. As you see, you can picture these people simply in your mind, because people have their own preferences based on their personalities.

An additional example in terms of social status would be a person who applies for a job as a general practitioner. He would definitely miss it if he dressed up in jeans and t-shirt on the interview. In order to get the job he would wear a nice tailored suit and dress to his best to give a good impression and represent himself in a professional manner. How we choose to apparel defines our social status in the society.

The last and the most important example is choosing the appropriate attire for a funeral service when you want to show respect for the person whose life you are remembering. Social etiquette dictates us to wear dark, formal dresses or suits. Etiquette of proper attire helps us to behave in a socially responsible way and helps us gain respect, trust and appreciation from others.

In conclusion clothing says a lot about us, our personality, our status in the society, and the way we follow social trends, and I believe that what a person looks on the outside resembles how he or she thinks on the inside.

 

Sajedeh B Negahban's comment:

Dear Samane,

,I highly enjoyed reading your essay. What I mostly liked was that unity  as a main element of a proper essay, was seen all through your essay. Moreover, the increasing importance of the examples you've  provided was very significant

 ّFarya Mokhtari's comment:

 Dear Samane,

Here are some points that I’ve noticed in your essay.

-1 I found your introduction very inviting as the reader will be curious to keep on reading your essay, because of the hook and the quote that you’ve restated.

-2 The thesis statement in this essay is : in order to express ourselves accurately we must be aware that clothing reflects personality traits, social status, and occasions.

-3 and  I believe that the thesis is sufficiently narrowed down.

-4 The pattern of organization is the use of examples as it’s a example essay, in my opinion the examples are nicely stated, but they are not thoroughly supported; for examples consider your first developing paragraph, I really didn’t get the idea of how the personality traits are reflected as the personalities are not stated, as a suggestion you can add the kinds of personalities the people have based on their choice of clothes .

-5 The use of proper transition has given your essay a sense of cohesion.

-6 The developing paragraphs support the thesis, but as I said before the examples are not developing enough.

-8 The conclusion is logical as it’s restating the thesis statement and has logical connection with the whole essay.

-9 I think the best part in your essay is the introduction as the hook is inviting and I really like the use of the quote.

 

 

 

Expository

Expository - Opinion 

Over the past century, sculptures have had dynamic and drastic changes. In the past most of the sculptures used to be figurative or imitation of nature, but artists broke out with looking at different materials and stop making pre-existing objects. The most significant example of these brilliant artists is Tony Cragg, whose artwork is exhibited on the Museum of Contemporary Art these days. As most of modern sculptors, his crafts are abstract which makes you think more about the concept. If you want to know more about modern sculpture, it would be a good idea to visit this exhibition.

Expository Factual Statement

Nowadays technological advancement plays a big role in our lives. It directly impacted our lives in terms of communication, business, and entertainment. One of the most important changes which technology, particularly the internet, brought us is easier communication. We can simply interact with people in remote areas or instantly share information with the help of social media. Businesses have also benefited immensely by their staff performing their tasks at home. E-banking also helps business access financial services in order to sell their goods online. Finally we can consider technology as a means of entertainment which is consist of online games, online libraries and e-books. Besides these breakthroughs technology will continue to benefit humankind.

Farya Mokhtari's Comment :

The topic is that the sculptures have had drastic changes.and I think it’s narrowed enough.

The topic sentence: Over the past century sculptures have had dynamic and drastic changes.

All the sentences are supporting the controlling idea and all of them are relevant.

It’s an expository paragraph and the writer has used appropriate example.