The Exemplification Essay

The need for clothing is one of life‘s bare necessities and how we choose to wear it defines the kind of person we are. I believe that the quote, “what you are is what you wear“, is entirely true because people express themselves and their feelings through their appearances. In order to express ourselves accurately we must be aware that clothing reflects personality traits, social status, and occasions.

To begin, consider athletes who tend to be more casual in their choice of clothes, and when it comes to color choices they would choose bright and vivid colors. Another example would be a manager who tends to be meticulous in choosing clothing. As you see, you can picture these people simply in your mind, because people have their own preferences based on their personalities.

An additional example in terms of social status would be a person who applies for a job as a general practitioner. He would definitely miss it if he dressed up in jeans and t-shirt on the interview. In order to get the job he would wear a nice tailored suit and dress to his best to give a good impression and represent himself in a professional manner. How we choose to apparel defines our social status in the society.

The last and the most important example is choosing the appropriate attire for a funeral service when you want to show respect for the person whose life you are remembering. Social etiquette dictates us to wear dark, formal dresses or suits. Etiquette of proper attire helps us to behave in a socially responsible way and helps us gain respect, trust and appreciation from others.

In conclusion clothing says a lot about us, our personality, our status in the society, and the way we follow social trends, and I believe that what a person looks on the outside resembles how he or she thinks on the inside.

 

Sajedeh B Negahban's comment:

Dear Samane,

,I highly enjoyed reading your essay. What I mostly liked was that unity  as a main element of a proper essay, was seen all through your essay. Moreover, the increasing importance of the examples you've  provided was very significant

 ّFarya Mokhtari's comment:

 Dear Samane,

Here are some points that I’ve noticed in your essay.

-1 I found your introduction very inviting as the reader will be curious to keep on reading your essay, because of the hook and the quote that you’ve restated.

-2 The thesis statement in this essay is : in order to express ourselves accurately we must be aware that clothing reflects personality traits, social status, and occasions.

-3 and  I believe that the thesis is sufficiently narrowed down.

-4 The pattern of organization is the use of examples as it’s a example essay, in my opinion the examples are nicely stated, but they are not thoroughly supported; for examples consider your first developing paragraph, I really didn’t get the idea of how the personality traits are reflected as the personalities are not stated, as a suggestion you can add the kinds of personalities the people have based on their choice of clothes .

-5 The use of proper transition has given your essay a sense of cohesion.

-6 The developing paragraphs support the thesis, but as I said before the examples are not developing enough.

-8 The conclusion is logical as it’s restating the thesis statement and has logical connection with the whole essay.

-9 I think the best part in your essay is the introduction as the hook is inviting and I really like the use of the quote.